Friday, March 14, 2008

writer's island prompt

awakening

it took her years to realize
she was someone she didn’t recognize.
her days were filled with tasks
she felt compelled to complete.
doing things before being asked,
that was her motto, just keep the peace.
she surprised herself the day she left,
it was an awakening, a freeing of the mind.
there was a quiet in the house that day,
unlike any other, when the noises climax
somewhere between, chaotic and ear piercing.
not the day she left, no it was calm, a hush
fell over the house as she said goodbye.
it was beyond her control now, they
had her in a straight jacket, as she was
headed for the padded room, down the
hall with the number 7 on the door.

14 comments:

Richard said...

Hi Leigh, In the first two lines I was so happy for her, but then she's carted away - in a straight jacket no less - and it seems like she's leaving one nut house for another...

Greyscale Territory said...

And she is still someone she doesn't recognise. And that number 7 is almost an ironic smile from Lady Fortune!

Interesting write!

Gemma

texasblu said...

Interesting twist! You got me!

Anonymous said...

stunning. i like it. at once heart-breaking and eye-opening.

Thaleia said...

Hi Leigh,

nice twist. Sometimes I feel like I'm going insane as well... but don't we all have times like that?

Blessings
Thaleia

gautami tripathy said...

I like such twisted endings..

dried piece of toast

Leigh Lear said...

thanks, this one sort took on a life of it's own, i didn't plan the twist.

paisley said...

i do love a twist... but that one has me screaming... no don't take me away i promise to be good!!!!!!!

tumblewords said...

Surely has a twist - I was so sure she was gaining her independence! Nicely done!

anthonynorth said...

Such is life. Nice twist.

Jeques said...

Is it the only escape? The world is so cruel to her.

I wish you well.

~ Jeques

Thinking aloud said...

OMG, i didn't see that coming!!!

jadey said...

What a great post. I hope she finds her own peace of mind in her new home.

rebecca said...

haunting...disturbing...very well done.