Wednesday, April 2, 2008

3ww writing prompt parallel, mysterious, bounce

a painful life is
parallel to a happy,
full life. one you live
out loud for all to see;
the other you hide inside
like it's not there. mysterious
ways become signs of danger to
those we love. growing ever, ever
so concerned. we think, "oh, they will
bounce out of it eventually." only to find
them one day in the bottom of a bottle of
sorrow where they have always kept a secret.

12 comments:

pjd said...

ouch, grim. Better to communicate than to keep it all inside.

pia said...

I think it's normal for kids to go through angst and keep it from their parents--but it's the parents job to make sure it doesn't go further and that's the hardest balancing act of all

lissa said...

something to think over, two ways of living - what to keep inside and what to let out

tumblewords said...

Oh, there are many of us out there that keep it all inside! Nice work!

paisley said...

ever so true... i think acceptance not only of ones self,, but of the shortcomings of others is an important lessen,, often overlooked until it is too late.....

TC said...

This is excellent Leigh. Wonderfully put.

anthonynorth said...

A well put sorrowful post. visually, it reminded me of a slippery slope.

One More Believer said...

beautifully poetic... loved the 4mat 2....

Leigh Lear said...

thanks everyone, and anthony, that is exactly what i had in mind, when depression hits, you just keep spiraling downward.

WriterKat said...

This is powerful and true. I love the way you built the words and the shape of the words.

gautami tripathy said...

Great visuals!

parallel plot

writerwoman said...

in the bottom of a bottle of
sorrow

like that phrase. This one definetly resonates.